A Borrowed Heart
10/11/2000
I can live without my dignity,
I'll survive when we're apart,
But please give back to me this day,
My bleeding borrowed heart.
I never said you could keep it forever ..........
You act as if nothing's happened,
You're a fool to continue this farce,
I've given up trying to reason with you,
Give it back is all I ask.
It doesn't mean anything to you anyway ..........
You've not answered any letters,
I wrote to you last week,
What made you think you had the right,
My borrowed heart to keep.
Please I implore you, give it back .............
You can sit in your tower laughing,
All night for all I care,
But if you don't return it to me real soon.
Then Lestat, listen to me ... beware!
I'll find you in the daylight hours .............
While you're hiding in your chambers,
Asleep in death's repose,
I'll sneak in and get back my heart and yours,
And you'll never again transpose.
Well, two can play this game you know! .................
By: Janine Daniel
Comments:
| Cheyanne | 10/11/2005 4:24:49 AM | ||
| I really do like the opening, QUOTE I can live without my dignity, I'll survive when we're apart, But please give back to me this day, My bleeding borrowed heart. And the one line in between each stanza nice touch there. Great tribute here to Lestat he was a character you loved and hated! The whole poem flowed so well! | |||
| Justice Chikandamina | aki@utande.co.zw | 10/11/2000 11:00:02 AM | |
| A very powerful poem and also a good read. I read it a couple of times. Thumbs up to you Janine. -Justice | |||
| Timothy Ritter | tim6582@yahoo.com | 10/11/2000 12:20:03 PM | |
| I can relate to this Janine, Very good! Tim | |||
| Timothy Ritter | tim6582@yahoo.com | 10/11/2000 12:31:20 PM | |
| Oh yeah .... and I have lended mine out too many to count, this is the part in the poem that I can relate to all too well, I can live without my dignity, I'll survive when we're apart, But please give back to me this day, My bleeding borrowed heart. I never said you could keep it forever .......... Good stuff here! Tim | |||
| Daniel A. Stafford | aqmstaffo@mailbag.com | 10/11/2000 4:17:27 PM | |
| There's a fantasy element involved here. It seems to me that Ive seen the name Lestat in a vampire story somewhere, and that would fit "sleeping in death's repose". I just do not remember where out of the many, many books, magazines, and short story anthologies I've seen this. Wonderful creativity, to play that part in so well it barely shows up. Lovely piece, both word & wit, Janine. My hat's off to you, Spinny gal!! | |||
| Philip G Bell | philip@bell-redbourn.freeserve.co.uk | 10/12/2000 10:35:24 PM | |
| Marvellous - boy I'm glad you are on this list! Well done! | |||
| Minnetta David | thespences@sympatico.ca | 10/13/2000 6:57:27 PM | |
| This poem really struck me. I feel like that a lot! Thank you for sharing :) Minnetta | |||
| Shiela | 7/13/2005 7:08:01 AM | ||
| Janine, I love it. | |||
| Roger | 7/13/2005 7:09:21 AM | ||
| I like that.. Great imagry. I hope, though, that this wasn't written in response to someone hurting you? | |||
| BobP | 7/13/2005 7:12:36 AM | ||
| Reminds me of Edgar Allen Poe writings. Good to hear from you, has been a very long time. | |||
| Janiece | 7/13/2005 7:14:09 AM | ||
| Damn girl! That's great! Thanks for sharing it with us and it's good to see you again! | |||
| Trisha | 7/19/2005 4:20:01 AM | ||
| Cool poem....I usually don't like poems but I like this one. (nothing against you, I'm talking in general) | |||
| ThaPoeticFire | 8/31/2005 9:32:06 AM | ||
| Janine , Great work ... Robert | |||
| Janine Daniel | janine@spinnys.com | www.spinnys.com | 9/1/2005 9:17:28 AM |
| Nominated for Poem of the Week at Flowing Quills poetry forum, 1/9/05 | |||
| Blueberry Kitten | 9/1/2005 9:19:01 AM | ||
| Uniquely woven tale of revenge? If I can't have you no one can. A thin line between love and hate. A lot going on in this one. | |||
| whatup64106 | 9/1/2005 9:22:10 AM | ||
| This is very nicely done, creative and emotional, can relate with this. | |||
| MysticWings575 | 9/2/2005 2:24:04 AM | ||
| I really felt this one. Beautifully expressed Janine. | |||
| Pete Peru | 9/2/2005 2:25:35 AM | ||
| Ahhh, love hurts....sometimes. Sweetly threatening...enjoyed, Pete Peru | |||
| Wanda Fable Weaver | 9/2/2005 2:27:18 AM | ||
| Janine,
You don't often hear the name Lestat, but I will tell you of a cat
(real kitty) that has the name. Does that tell you something about the
cat? This is a good write, and I must say, "Janine, I am fast becoming a fan of your poetry." Wanda | |||
| dragul angelas | 9/3/2005 3:52:01 AM | ||
| i enjoyed the tale of a woman scorn a bleeding heart is more than a wooden stake mabye at the end we end up with the dust to dust its dark and brooding angelas | |||
| lanaia74 | 9/5/2005 2:32:43 AM | ||
| AWESOME, and very worthy of the nomination | |||
| morbid5656tripp89 | 10/13/2005 4:08:51 AM | ||
| thats
so amazing. i could really kinda relate to that with one of my ex
boyfriends. i have to say my mother was right you are one of the most talented writers ive ever seen. there is completely no words to tell how talently amazing you are. whoo! Tara | |||
| xXNitaXx | 10/14/2005 5:15:03 AM | ||
| This is awesome Janine. I love the heart beating above the poem too. thumbsup! Nita | |||
| guardianofthenight | 11/3/2005 5:32:16 AM | ||
| ahhhh...lestat, a character you can love and hate all at the same time. I think you captured him very well. Almost better than Anne herself! ~~AMY | |||
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