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An Amazing Journey



02/11/2001


An Amazing Journey

My strength at last has been put to the test
I hover here between life and death
And I want you all to understand
If it's at all possible I will let you know
The place I am now and where I'll go

Spirals of time spin out patterns of thought
Encased in a web as if they'd been caught
Forever moving upwards a glittering display
So beautiful to see I am quite amazed
Some are shimmering, spinning and others are ablaze

To the visions dancing in my mind
Beckoning smoky wisps reach out and I find
So much love washing over my psyche
Come with us for now you are free
Is the message infused with the inner me

All the while casting a silhouette
Shapes and shadows dance around my feet
Some things of substance but not like me
I hear soothing voices all around
A tantalizing, teasing, melodic sound

I now walk away into the places you didn't know
I feel rather warm and my body's aglow
How excited I feel and soon I'll know all
Something wondrous is happening to me
While I still reside in my earthbound body

Magic seems to now be on my fingertips
An ethereal voice emanates from my lips
My eyes though closed sees into the future far
And now I've found the answer but that I cannot show
Although it is some of which we've always known

Janine Daniel

By: Janine Daniel

Author's Comments

This poem is a writing challenge I was offered in the literary club I belong to. I hope you like it ... :o)


Comments
Sharon Wilshiresewilshire@cox.net
2/11/2001 12:15:30 PM
Janine,
This poem really gives a person something to think about. Intricately
designed to present a pleasing picture of life in death. Thanks,
Sharon
Joveac

2/12/2001 8:59:29 PM
Excellent!!!
Way to go. You did a great job with this challenge.
Way kewl mate.

joveac
dhicks

2/23/2001 5:43:49 AM
Hello, This is excellent indeed. I just now saw this.

Dennis
Tammy

2/23/2001 5:45:35 AM
Congrats Janine. Good imagery in this poem!

Tammy
Janine Daniel

2/23/2001 6:19:04 AM
I won first place with this one.
Shannon Wendler

3/8/2001 11:48:40 AM
Well done Janine! Keep up the hard work....
Dennis

3/8/2001 11:50:20 AM
Congrats Janine, very well done and very hard to do!
Silkie

3/8/2001 11:52:13 AM
hey I didn't see this before! wonderful work Janine. Congrats on the win!
Rachelle Wiegand

8/30/2001 9:59:00 AM
A whole other place, a journey full of beautiful imagery and fantastic sights!!

This second stanza is my favorite:

Spirals of time spin out patterns of thought
Encased in a web as if they'd been caught
Forever moving upwards a glittering display
So beautiful to see I am quite amazed
Some are shimmering, spinning and others are ablaze

I love the way this is worded... great work, Janine! A neat read~

Love & Peace, ~Rachelle
Daniel A Stafford

8/30/2001 10:02:40 AM
Wonderful poem, Janine. It really brings a sense of wonder & hope, in a strange way it's like a sort of homecoming. I like this part the best:

Magic seems to now be on my fingertips
An ethereal voice emanates from my lips
My eyes though closed sees into the future far
And now I've found the answer but that I cannot show
Although it is some of which we've always known

It seems to me if we look inside deep enough, we somehow KNOW things, like what's really right and what we should do....and this brushes up against that really well. Excellent writing!

Dan
Marcia Ellen

8/30/2001 10:06:03 AM
Hi d Ho Janine!! Excellent job with this!! Great work!! Thanks for sharing it!!

That Happy Chica
Marcia Ellen


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