02/11/2001
An Amazing Journey
My strength at last has been put to the testI hover here between life and death
And I want you all to understand
If it's at all possible I will let you know
The place I am now and where I'll go
Spirals of time spin out patterns of thought
Encased in a web as if they'd been caught
Forever moving upwards a glittering display
So beautiful to see I am quite amazed
Some are shimmering, spinning and others are ablaze
To the visions dancing in my mind
Beckoning smoky wisps reach out and I find
So much love washing over my psyche
Come with us for now you are free
Is the message infused with the inner me
All the while casting a silhouette
Shapes and shadows dance around my feet
Some things of substance but not like me
I hear soothing voices all around
A tantalizing, teasing, melodic sound
I now walk away into the places you didn't know
I feel rather warm and my body's aglow
How excited I feel and soon I'll know all
Something wondrous is happening to me
While I still reside in my earthbound body
Magic seems to now be on my fingertips
An ethereal voice emanates from my lips
My eyes though closed sees into the future far
And now I've found the answer but that I cannot show
Although it is some of which we've always known
Janine Daniel
By: Janine Daniel
Author's Comments
This poem is a writing challenge I was offered in the literary club I belong to. I hope you like it ... :o)
Comments
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| Sharon Wilshire | sewilshire@cox.net | 2/11/2001 12:15:30 PM | |
| Janine, This poem really gives a person something to think about. Intricately designed to present a pleasing picture of life in death. Thanks, Sharon | |||
| Joveac | 2/12/2001 8:59:29 PM | ||
| Excellent!!! Way to go. You did a great job with this challenge. Way kewl mate. joveac | |||
| dhicks | 2/23/2001 5:43:49 AM | ||
| Hello, This is excellent indeed. I just now saw this. Dennis | |||
| Tammy | 2/23/2001 5:45:35 AM | ||
| Congrats Janine. Good imagery in this poem! Tammy | |||
| Janine Daniel | 2/23/2001 6:19:04 AM | ||
| I won first place with this one. | |||
| Shannon Wendler | 3/8/2001 11:48:40 AM | ||
| Well done Janine! Keep up the hard work.... | |||
| Dennis | 3/8/2001 11:50:20 AM | ||
| Congrats Janine, very well done and very hard to do! | |||
| Silkie | 3/8/2001 11:52:13 AM | ||
| hey I didn't see this before! wonderful work Janine. Congrats on the win! | |||
| Rachelle Wiegand | 8/30/2001 9:59:00 AM | ||
| A whole other place, a journey full of beautiful imagery and fantastic sights!! This second stanza is my favorite: Spirals of time spin out patterns of thought Encased in a web as if they'd been caught Forever moving upwards a glittering display So beautiful to see I am quite amazed Some are shimmering, spinning and others are ablaze I love the way this is worded... great work, Janine! A neat read~ Love & Peace, ~Rachelle | |||
| Daniel A Stafford | 8/30/2001 10:02:40 AM | ||
| Wonderful
poem, Janine. It really brings a sense of wonder & hope, in a
strange way it's like a sort of homecoming. I like this part the best: Magic seems to now be on my fingertips An ethereal voice emanates from my lips My eyes though closed sees into the future far And now I've found the answer but that I cannot show Although it is some of which we've always known It seems to me if we look inside deep enough, we somehow KNOW things, like what's really right and what we should do....and this brushes up against that really well. Excellent writing! Dan | |||
| Marcia Ellen | 8/30/2001 10:06:03 AM | ||
| Hi d Ho Janine!! Excellent job with this!! Great work!! Thanks for sharing it!! That Happy Chica Marcia Ellen | |||
